When Flowers Were In Bloom
in full bloom,
I saw you.
You were more beautiful
than any blossom
in any garden,
in any city,
in any state,
in any continent,
in any planet,
You were more beautiful --
When wildflowers sweetened
the bee laden days,
and sudden northern winds
blew those strange Saturdays
into so many lost Sundays,
I danced like a dervish
whirling, whirling
till flames burned
above my head.
And though I offered days
of bells and honey,
your heart walked
down a narrow road
to a temple in the east
never to return --
I lost myself.
And in evening light,
I sat in a pasture
with a thousand bluebells
and waited for the stars,
and the cosmos dark daggers
shredded my heart,
and I hung naked
on the North Star
and wept --
Still,
I thought,
You were more beautiful
than any blossom
in any garden,
in any city,
in any state,
in any continent,
in any planet,
You were more beautiful --
I saw you.
You were more beautiful
than any blossom
in any garden,
in any city,
in any state,
in any continent,
in any planet,
You were more beautiful --
When wildflowers sweetened
the bee laden days,
and sudden northern winds
blew those strange Saturdays
into so many lost Sundays,
I danced like a dervish
whirling, whirling
till flames burned
above my head.
And though I offered days
of bells and honey,
your heart walked
down a narrow road
to a temple in the east
never to return --
I lost myself.
And in evening light,
I sat in a pasture
with a thousand bluebells
and waited for the stars,
and the cosmos dark daggers
shredded my heart,
and I hung naked
on the North Star
and wept --
Still,
I thought,
You were more beautiful
than any blossom
in any garden,
in any city,
in any state,
in any continent,
in any planet,
You were more beautiful --
The sweetness of that first love is so huge, rich and all consuming and you know you will never, ever see such beauty again. Love holds you in thrall and you lose yourself in these feelings. What happened? You don't understand where that love went or when her heart began to wander from you, but now her heart is gone and she's forgotten her vows. How sad; sitting, waiting and finally, finally coming to the realization that your love is lost forever. Now all you do is sit and remember that first love and you know that even now God's beauty cannot compare to hers.
ReplyDeleteWow! I probably felt this wrong, but it definitely brought up some strong feelings. First, feelings of love and excitement so strong that it isn't possible that only you can be feeling them, then come the feelings of betrayal and hurt so deep that you know you'll never live through them and then comes the waiting and hoping in vain, until it finally hits you...it's over.
Now you sit and remember with fondness and sometimes with a twinge of sadness as well...and still as you look up at God's beauty you know that even that cannot compare with hers.
Okay, I probably got it wrong, but I have to say that this is one powerful poem that invokes some really powerful images.
Very,very good job big brother!!
This is blissful style..
ReplyDeletewell penned.
Thanks.
have fun in the rally.
little sister
ReplyDeletethank u
for the in depth response
&
ur take is ur take
just thank u for the read
may u always walk
in the light
later
este
much thanks
ReplyDelete&
will do
peace
este
This is spectacular.
ReplyDeletethe way you paint with your words, the depth
of feeling invoked by subtlety.
the spiritual, metaphysical, just incredible.
Now I have to add YOU to my regular reading list.
I am glad you enjoyed my writing. There is lots of it! I look forward to future commentary from a writer I respect.
Blessings,
Irene the Bean
irene
ReplyDeletethank u so much
for the kind words
i have u on my blog list
& will enjoy reading ur work
later my sister
love & peace
este
This was gorgeous! This stanza really spoke to me:
ReplyDelete"And though you laid with me,
your heart walked
down a narrow road
to a temple in the east
never to return,
and I denied the ghost,
lost my//self --"
Thank you!
Its Love-ly ! So much love flowing in the words :) Made me smile :) Love indeed makes things around us look beautiful , but lesser than the eyes in which we drown ! :)
ReplyDeleteStill,
ReplyDeleteI thought,
You were more beautiful
than any blossom
in any garden
lovely.
aleeza, marit, & adreamygal
ReplyDeletei'm glad u gals read my piece
& thanks for the kind words
power to the poets my sisters :)
peace & love
este
it is lovely. and yes I am smiling as i read it. brings a serene happy effect. would come back and read your other works at leisure. all the best.
ReplyDeletethank you
ReplyDeletei have visited ur blog
several times
& intend to visit
regularly
peace & love
este
the imagery is breathe taking.
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Happy Monday,
Bless you!
xxx
this is beautiful and with such great imagery ... one of the best pieces I've read lately ... thanks!
ReplyDeletepeace & love my brother
thank you fenny
ReplyDeletei appreciate the compliment
& your poetry
may you always walk
in the light
much love
este
the imagery is breathe taking
ReplyDeletejingle
thank you
your too kind
much love in your life
este
"and I hung naked on the north star and wept"
ReplyDeletethat speaks so much within a simple poignant line. I adore this piece and am so happy you shared it for life in quotations! This is stunning and timeless! Bravo fine poet!
gracias kellie
ReplyDelete& u know how much i enjoy
ur work
much love & peace
in your life
este
I read this again big brother and it was as wonderful the second and third time. Each word paints a vivid picture and brings the senses into it as well. I can see the sky with the stars and moon shining so brightly and feel the night breeze as it ruffles my hair and the grass beneath my feet feels so cool and sleek as I dance wildly to music only I can hear. The hurt throbs in my heart and my chest while my poor head pounds from the tears I've shed.
ReplyDeleteEach time I read this the image was different, but just as powerful. I hope to see more of your work and quite soon. Praying blessings on you.